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Post by Red_Line » Wed Nov 05, 2008 3:38 pm

I'm a sucker for reasonable quality certificates so what the heck, I'm in.  ;D
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Post by Red_Line » Tue Nov 18, 2008 4:23 pm

I'm not posting it just yet, but here's the overview:

Title:  Michelle Shock

Genre: Futurama

Beginnings:  Returning from a long journey, the discover everything had changed; Someone has to face up to reality.

Middles:  There is a profound need for booze; there is a profound, life-changing event; Everyone hides for a while

End:  Tragedy strikes out; That unremarkable object in part 1 turns out to be the secret; Everything turns out great
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Post by Red_Line » Sat Nov 29, 2008 12:36 am

Here it is, details as per prior append.

Word count: 4,998 


Edit:  Files updated to insert subliminal "Hail Graham" correct a very minor typo.  If you've already downloaded it, it's probably not worth doing again.  Unless you're a judge - then by all means, please use these versions.  ;)
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Post by mwroach » Sun Nov 30, 2008 4:32 am

I'm not sure if we're allowed to comment or not, but I just really have to say that this was a super great story! I loved reading it.

I recently read your 3rd place entry from last year, and ever since I knew your fic would be my main competition. I love the ending to this story. I also love that Bender was in it for more then two seconds; he really makes the show (or, in this case, the story). Great job, Red_Line. I wish you the best of luck, not that you need it. Once again, awesome story!
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Post by Red_Line » Thu Dec 04, 2008 3:32 am

Thank you.  :leela
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Post by THM » Sun Dec 07, 2008 12:47 am

[Vader]Impressive. Most impressive.[/Vader]

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Post by Officer 1BDI » Mon Dec 08, 2008 1:29 am

I think I like this even more than your entry from last year.  ;D  Bender was especially hilarious.
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Post by missy_misery » Thu Dec 18, 2008 4:51 am

One of my favorite entries this year.  Good job using the full cast (even Nibbler, who was terrific here), was consistantly hillarious. 
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Post by soylentOrange » Sun Dec 21, 2008 3:35 pm

this was a terrific story.  Congrats on your second place finish!
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Post by Red_Line » Sun Dec 21, 2008 5:18 pm

Thank you everyone.  Frankly, I'm rather amazed to have taken second place, but I'm also fond of saying that authors are their own harshest critics, and I guess this just confirms that. ;D
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Re: Red_Line is in

Post by c_nordlander » Sun Dec 21, 2008 9:09 pm

Typoes: "everyones attention" needs an apostrophe; "this time is wasn't the baby".

Brilliant title, and the writing is very nice. As people have said, everyone is in character here, even Nibbler. I'm particularly impressed with Fry and Bender. Some hilarious lines and jokes that rank with the best of the show. In fact, this could easily be an episode (well, in a spin-off, maybe). The Wussies are a hilarious species, and that whole section feels like good satire of the average Fry/Leela romance fic, to me at least. The plot is good, if ludicrously circuitous (but nothing worse than has been on the show), and quite emotive as well. Nice ending. I'm rather impressed by the amount of story you got in without anything feeling cramped or rushed.

I don't have any real problems with this fic. Perhaps it simply didn't grab me as hard as it could have done, but that's probably the fault of my taste rather than anything in the story. Well worth your final position in the competition.

My rating: A-

EDIT: Oh, and I liked the Torgo's Executive Powder ref!
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