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- Wed Feb 06, 2008 7:02 pm
- Forum: 2007 Writing Competition
- Topic: I'm down
- Replies: 11
- Views: 11650
Re: I'm down
Yeah, I liked Zeno's playsets too...
- Fri Feb 01, 2008 8:50 pm
- Forum: Writing Help
- Topic: [work in progress] Parallel Lives
- Replies: 86
- Views: 68672
Re: [work in progress] Parallel Lives
Well I read through and enjoyed it quite a bit. I like the fairly subtle characterization of "Phil" in particular. I like how you reworked the beginning--it seems more unified now. Some very good scenes in here--Fry searching for the bullet, his attempts to tell "Blue" that sh...
- Tue Jan 22, 2008 8:34 pm
- Forum: Writing Help
- Topic: [work in progress] Parallel Lives
- Replies: 86
- Views: 68672
Re: [work in progress] Parallel Lives
OK, here's my reactions. Probably way too detailed at this point in terms of proofreading, but look for 'comments' on overarching themes.
Overall, me like. More please.
JN
Overall, me like. More please.
JN
- Mon Jan 21, 2008 2:17 pm
- Forum: Completed Writing
- Topic: REVIEW-Death Clock Countdown--Futurama
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2464
Re: REVIEW-Death Clock Countdown--Futurama
Hi SiM, I've read some of your other comments/reviews on this site, and had been very impressed. Well, fanfic writers are a dime a dozen, but a honest and thorough reviewer is priceless. I was honestly surprised to receive the review, but it was a pleasant surprise. I enjoyed the praise, of cours...
- Wed Jan 16, 2008 10:07 pm
- Forum: Writing Help
- Topic: [work in progress] Parallel Lives
- Replies: 86
- Views: 68672
Re: [work in progress] Parallel Lives
Hi Graham, I can't believe it took me so long to find this. Reading what I assume is the first draft (attachment in your first post), I agree with most of SW's comments on Amy's behavior, Fry's motivation for opening the boxes, etc. I also agree the word "menacing" was distracting. I don'...
- Thu Dec 06, 2007 11:48 pm
- Forum: 2007 Writing Competition
- Topic: Red_Line is in
- Replies: 13
- Views: 15737
Re: Red_Line is in
And I had a lot of fun reading it. A lot more light-hearted than some of your other stuff--but it suits you well. Loved the weapons in this one, and the ending...
- Thu Dec 06, 2007 11:46 pm
- Forum: 2007 Writing Competition
- Topic: I'm down
- Replies: 11
- Views: 11650
Re: I'm down
Good Luck, dude! You definitely hold your own in what looks like a good contest!
- Mon Jul 02, 2007 2:16 pm
- Forum: Completed Writing
- Topic: REVIEW-Death Clock Countdown--Futurama
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2464
REVIEW-Death Clock Countdown--Futurama
Hello, my first fanfic, script format. I'm sorely tempted to write a second one, but want to make sure that I shouldn't be stopped before I multiply. I'd appreciate any comments--it takes courage to read a fic by a newbie! Synopsis: Fry and Leela race against time against a revised death clock pr...