Yeah, I liked Zeno's playsets too...

Well I read through and enjoyed it quite a bit.  I like the fairly subtle characterization of "Phil" in particular.  I like how you reworked the beginning--it seems more unified now.  Some very good scenes in here--Fry searching for the bullet, his attempts to tell "Blue" that sh...

OK, here's my reactions.  Probably way too detailed at this point in terms of proofreading, but look for 'comments' on overarching themes.

Overall, me like.  More please.

JN

Hi SiM, I've read some of your other comments/reviews on this site, and had been very impressed.  Well, fanfic writers are a dime a dozen, but a honest and thorough reviewer is priceless.  I was honestly surprised to receive the review, but it was a pleasant surprise.  I enjoyed the praise, of cours...

Hi Graham, I can't believe it took me so long to find this.  Reading what I assume is the first draft (attachment in your first post), I agree with most of SW's comments on Amy's behavior, Fry's motivation for opening the boxes, etc. I also agree the word "menacing" was distracting. I don'...

And I had a lot of fun reading it.  A lot more light-hearted than some of your other stuff--but it suits you well.  Loved the weapons in this one, and the ending...

Good Luck, dude!  You definitely hold your own in what looks like a good contest!

Hello, my first  fanfic, script format.  I'm sorely tempted to write a second one, but want to make sure that I shouldn't be stopped before I multiply.  I'd appreciate any comments--it takes courage to read a fic by a newbie! Synopsis: Fry and Leela race against time against a revised death clock pr...