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by Dewey Finn
Fri Mar 27, 2009 1:37 am
Forum: Simpsons and Futurama Discussions
Topic: REVIEW: Gone Maggie Gone
Replies: 6
Views: 1122

Re: REVIEW: Gone Maggie Gone

many people in nohomers club seemed to like it, but not i... i dunno, i thought the mystery writing here was too obvious, not too much 'tension' (yeah, the ring thing wasn't good enough for me either) and the rest of the episode wasn't really good either imo.  i do agre...
by Dewey Finn
Mon Oct 27, 2008 12:16 am
Forum: Writing Help
Topic: Help for my script... "Motorwrath"
Replies: 4
Views: 2630

Re: Help for my script... "Motorwrath"

Thanks Spy in Mancunia for spending your time modifying the faults!  Yes, I edited my post along with your corrections... I'm right now working on Act 2.  I may be able to post it in... next weekend or so because I'm a student during weekdays.  Anyway, I know how the story should be s...
by Dewey Finn
Sun Oct 19, 2008 2:06 pm
Forum: Writing Help
Topic: Help for my script... "Motorwrath"
Replies: 4
Views: 2630

Re: Help for my script... "Motorwrath"

Since I dunno how rtf. works, I'll just post the entire thing here.  Then I'll edit along on this post Act 1 (OPENS with fast, stimulating and tensing music in the background while the view shows Homer’s sweaty, worried face) (The music continues and view now shows Homer driving inside the car;...
by Dewey Finn
Sun Oct 19, 2008 4:54 am
Forum: Writing Help
Topic: Help for my script... "Motorwrath"
Replies: 4
Views: 2630

Help for my script... "Motorwrath"

This is not a completed script yet--I'm only done with the first draft of act 1.  I've decided to get some help this early because this time, I want to get some help and advise from you guys when the work is in the primary stage.  Anyway, I've attached the file to the post.  If you wa...
by Dewey Finn
Tue Sep 09, 2008 10:42 pm
Forum: Completed Writing
Topic: "Loved Bones" script
Replies: 6
Views: 1908

Re: "Loved Bones" script

So, er, any opinions?
by Dewey Finn
Tue Sep 02, 2008 10:14 pm
Forum: Completed Writing
Topic: "Loved Bones" script
Replies: 6
Views: 1908

Re: "Loved Bones" script

Alright it's completed ------------------------------ Act 3 (OPENS on a flower ground; Lisa is seen skipping with bunnies, ponies, raccoons and other furry animals and enjoying the moment) LISA (Hides her eyes; Takes out a book from thin air) Ah, what book would it be for today? (Opens the eye; gets...
by Dewey Finn
Wed Aug 27, 2008 11:35 pm
Forum: Completed Writing
Topic: "Loved Bones" script
Replies: 6
Views: 1908

Re: "Loved Bones" script

Act 2 (OPENS in the sky; Bart’s soul tearfully and desperately fight against the anti-gravity and pull himself down to the Earth) BART’S SOUL (Tearfully) Please! (Tries to snatch his halo, but his hands go through his halo) I have too much to live for! I have yet to drink mixed liquor drinks and mee...
by Dewey Finn
Wed Aug 27, 2008 11:34 pm
Forum: Completed Writing
Topic: "Loved Bones" script
Replies: 6
Views: 1908

"Loved Bones" script

The first two acts are finished and I'm working on 3rd act now (I know how the story will go, I'm just writing dialogues and stuffs now) It's also my second attempt of writing a complete script.  Constructive criticisms are welcome Chalkboard Gag: Mrs. Krabappel did not say 'Let them eat cake' ...
by Dewey Finn
Tue Jul 15, 2008 1:03 pm
Forum: Completed Writing
Topic: 'Fat Bart' Script
Replies: 5
Views: 1470

Re: 'Fat Bart' Script

Whereas, for example, if you had Marge and Homer organise an elaborate rescue attempt, it would seem more worthy of all the build-up to this point. I actually had that as one of the options to end the episode, but I like the twist of showing what the audiences know while the character doesn't know ...
by Dewey Finn
Tue Jul 15, 2008 1:44 am
Forum: Completed Writing
Topic: 'Fat Bart' Script
Replies: 5
Views: 1470

Re: 'Fat Bart' Script

The idea is fairly original: while the "fat camp" thing has been done before (I haven't seen the episode, though), as you pointed out, having Bart *wanting* to go there is nice and unexpected. The plot progresses nicely, and generally in the style of the show. I thought the resolution was a bit sim...
by Dewey Finn
Sat Jul 12, 2008 1:41 am
Forum: Finished Art
Topic: Requests & Commissions
Replies: 13
Views: 7863

Re: Requests & Commissions

I don't know if it would be a good question to ask, but can anyone color this?  I'd just like to see what it would be like if my arts were colored

http://img124.imageshack.us/img124/1043 ... e10xm2.jpg
by Dewey Finn
Thu Jul 10, 2008 11:50 pm
Forum: Simpsons and Futurama Discussions
Topic: Colin graduated Yardale with an average of 4
Replies: 36
Views: 4517

Re: Colin graduated Yardale with an average of 4

Colin, Hugh Parkfield and Mr. Bergstrom make a good connection to themselves as Lisa's perfect male companion or role model.  We don't know about Colin yet, but Hugh Parkfield and Bergstrom both share a similarity of being spoiled of Lisa's eye or view due to Homer's bumbling acts
by Dewey Finn
Thu Jul 10, 2008 11:47 pm
Forum: Art Help
Topic: Recommendations please. Questions included
Replies: 2
Views: 2657

Re: Recommendations please. Questions included

Wow, nice to see a new member with such good art! Thank you! I really like these. I think the characters' heads are occasionally too big, though, like Lisa's in the "The Adolescence" picture, or Milhouse's in the one above, and the hair sometimes looks a bit sketchy. I'll leave the more substantial...
by Dewey Finn
Thu Jul 10, 2008 11:16 pm
Forum: Completed Writing
Topic: 'Fat Bart' Script
Replies: 5
Views: 1470

Re: 'Fat Bart' Script

Act 3 (OPENS with bunch of tired fat kids slowly walking their way to the cafeteria for their ‘meal’; some are even seen crawling due to his or her tiredness) BART (Hopeful) Sweet diet pills! Oh, how I miss thou—(The camp counselor snatches Bart on the back) Woaah!! COUNSELOR Missing anything? BART ...
by Dewey Finn
Thu Jul 10, 2008 11:16 pm
Forum: Completed Writing
Topic: 'Fat Bart' Script
Replies: 5
Views: 1470

'Fat Bart' Script

Here's something that I did in NoHomersClub.  I'd like an opinion from you guys.  Thanks Blackboard Gag: The ability to lick my elbow is not enough to present in ‘Show and Tell’ Lisa’s Sax Tune: To the tune of ‘In the Mood’ Couch Gag: The original family comes in and gets bewildered by see...