Jodie Foster's voice is slightly deeper than Yeardley Smith's. (She also has a very unique voice, I wonder why she hasn't been on the show before.)

I like your style. You know how to pull a reader through a story. I didn't spot any technical problems, but then again I don't have a good eye for that kind of thing. I have one problem with the plot, so here's a spoiler that people should avoid if they'd rather read the whole story instead of an un...