STORY: Deep Cover

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STORY: Deep Cover

Postby c_nordlander » Fri Apr 04, 2014 8:58 pm

A horror/SF (?) story. An ordinary guy gets the compulsive idea that he is actually an alien replicant. How will he find out? How *can* you find out?

All critique is of course greatly appreciated.

Note: I originally wrote this story as a radio play (though it ended up being way too short to qualify). Imagine it being spoken aloud for the best effect.
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The noose draws tighter;
This is the end;
I'm a good fighter
But a bad friend;
I've played the traitor
Over and over;
I'm a good hater
But a bad lover.

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Re: STORY: Deep Cover

Postby Gulliver63 » Sat Apr 05, 2014 7:23 am

Neat! The first thing that caught my eye was the reference to the brain cortex, which I thought was interesting and very relevent to the story. It succeeded in making my skin crawl at the end - mission accomplished. Well done.
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Re: STORY: Deep Cover

Postby missy_misery » Mon Apr 21, 2014 12:42 am

Delightfully spine tingling, Chris!
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