STORY: "Summanus"

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STORY: "Summanus"

Post by c_nordlander » Sat Jan 29, 2005 12:35 pm

A short (yes, really) story which I wrote a while ago and have now translated into English. It won't take too long to read, and all comments are welcome.

If you absolutely need a genre, I think "horror" describes it, but a rather metaphysical and non-gory kind of horror.

Finally, to explain the title: Summanus was the Etruscan, and later Roman, god of thunder-at-night. You'll see what that has to do with the story...

EDIT: If you want to read this story, PM me and I'll mail it to you.
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The noose draws tighter;
This is the end;
I'm a good fighter
But a bad friend;
I've played the traitor
Over and over;
I'm a good hater
But a bad lover.


Elinor Wylie, "Peregrine"
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Re:STORY: "Summanus"

Post by Dagdamor » Wed Feb 02, 2005 5:29 am

Well, *that* was scary.

After reading I still feel like somebody (something?) is here, it's near, behind me... (*shudder*) no, no, it's just Chris' fantasy, I shouldn't believe in that. The writing itself is great, I read it easily on the single breath, but the plot... poor Emelie, I don't know what had happened with her actually, but, you know, for some reason I don't really believe it will be better than what she had before. There was a whole life ahead her... but she sensibly decided to leave it... I cannot understand this. Poor girl.

Overall: very interesting and thrilling story. Recommended to read. You won't be disappointed.
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Re:STORY: "Summanus"

Post by Archonix » Wed Feb 02, 2005 11:49 am

Freaky. I like the last line especially. :)
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Re:STORY: "Summanus"

Post by SirMustapha » Thu Feb 03, 2005 10:04 am

I think the effect was well achieved - the presentation of the story, and all. Nice effect. It looks like some of those ideas that other writers would spend days trying to get right, but you seem to pull it off effortlessly, like you were just playing. In my opinion, that's also the story's weakness, in my opinion: merely because the piece pales in comparison to your best works (e.g. Search For Zapp). Or maybe I'm not particularly thrilled by this kind of story. But even still, this gets a high rating from me. Say... 9. :)
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Re:STORY: "Summanus"

Post by c_nordlander » Thu Feb 03, 2005 8:14 pm

Woo, thanks a lot, everyone! I'm happy now. ;D
The noose draws tighter;
This is the end;
I'm a good fighter
But a bad friend;
I've played the traitor
Over and over;
I'm a good hater
But a bad lover.


Elinor Wylie, "Peregrine"
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Re:STORY: "Summanus"

Post by Meteorite » Fri Feb 04, 2005 7:41 pm

Can't sleep, darkness will get me... Can't sleep, darkness will get me...


Why, oh why do I keep reading these things at night?
Good story Chris, and very chilling!
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