This story was written by my 13 year old sister, Laura. She has begged me to post this so direct all hate-mail to her.
Enjoy.(or not)
Something my crazy ass sister wrote
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Re: Something my crazy ass sister wrote
Er... there are no Simpsons characters in this story (to my notice, at least), so it should be in the Creative Pen board.
Spelling was seriously wounded, but the soul still burns!
(Not sure what else I could say about the story. Hmm... just remind your sister that correct spelling saves lives.)
EDIT: Fixed now.
Spelling was seriously wounded, but the soul still burns!
(Not sure what else I could say about the story. Hmm... just remind your sister that correct spelling saves lives.)
EDIT: Fixed now.
Last edited by Anonymous on Wed Aug 31, 2005 5:33 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Pretty little monster
Went to the good school
Left with honours
Brand new tycoon
Sitting with a harpoon
-- Mother Mother, "Business Man"
Now offering writing commissions! Fanfiction or original, PM me for more information.
Re: Something my crazy ass sister wrote
Now lets see how long it takes for somebody to MST this thing...
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Re: Something my crazy ass sister wrote
I second Chris. The story has terrible spelling. 
After correcting typos and slang words it will be much more readable.
About story plot... well, it's not too bad, but it's noticeable that your sister started writing with enthusiasm, but got bored after several paragraphs - the ending is very abrupt and hard to understand.
At least it's not too long like certain vampire quizzes...
After correcting typos and slang words it will be much more readable.About story plot... well, it's not too bad, but it's noticeable that your sister started writing with enthusiasm, but got bored after several paragraphs - the ending is very abrupt and hard to understand.
At least it's not too long like certain vampire quizzes...