- Insane Underling
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Nothing science-fictional or fantastic about this one: it's very much slice-of-life. (It is in fact rather similar to my previous story "Innocence, a Novel", if you've read it.) Don't expect any dramatic twists. A bit of an experiment with how minimalist you can make your plot while still writing a proper story.
Criticise away! Be as ruthless as you like, even if it's just minor things like grammar or sentence structure. It's extremely short (less than a page!), so it's not a massive commitment. I'm intending to send this to a competition for stories of <1,000 words, but if you think that I should scrap this and send something more dramatic, feel free to say so too.
Can be read here.
This is the end;
I'm a good fighter
But a bad friend;
I've played the traitor
Over and over;
I'm a good hater
But a bad lover.
Elinor Wylie, "Peregrine"
Creator of the Waving Universe
Crack!Fic, The Marge Simpson Way: "Just then, Sir Lancelot rode up on a white horse and saved Joan of Arc. They got married and lived in a spaceship. The end." - Tales from the Public Domain, "Hot Child In The City"
- Terry Y
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