THOH - Timeline of Horror

[Hellfish]

Yay, a FINISHED script!
The reason I didn't post it in the reviews section is that it involves some "Hitchhikers guide to the galaxy" stuff that I'm not 100% sure about (It's been quite a while since I read those books) so if I made a mistake somewhere, just shout!

Also note, that having read "Hitchhikers" helps a bit.It's not a requirement, but it helps. Having watched at least a majority of the canon THOH's helps alot,too.

Enjoy, and thanks for all the fish!

[Dagdamor]

(warning, spoilers ahead)

Okay, what to say? First, it's original. Very original. A collection of different THOHs in one story... it's unusual enough to work. The writing is good, and some descriptions are just great imo. The only nitpick I have is the constantly missing space after commas. But this can be fixed with only one search/replace operation. Some really funny jokes there, my respect, I particularly liked the moment from the very beginning (fridge's contents) and that one:

HOMER's BRAIN
Uh-oh.. Ehm, just smile and say yes.

Just LOL.
The ending is a bit confusing, but this is THOH, so it's okay I guess.
Overall - nice story, not too big but interesting to read. Good work!

[Hellfish]

Hehe,thanks. I'll clean the commas and upload again.

[c_nordlander]

Always nice to see a new THOH script!

OK, I haven't read the Hitchhiker books in a while, so I might not be able to correct any mistakes. Just so you know.

It should be "2 days' time".

Funny opening, particularly Bart's line and the IOU's.

(Hmm... Lisa using the soda for an experiment, might this be foreshadowing? Heh heh.)

In fact, this continues funny. Oooh, Restaurant at the End of the Universe! I really like the leaflet.

You missed the spaces before the parentheses in the bit where Lisa reads the leaflet.

I'd love for this episode to be on TV, if only for the display of cosmic destruction.

Nice (if confusing) stuff with the time, particularly Homer's line about food that can be eaten in less than twenty minutes.

OK, some cases of missing the space after punctuation.

Hmm, I *really* don't like that "Hex and the City" short, but I guess that can't be held against you.

*Nor* Stretch Dude and Clobber Girl. Sheesh, I like this story, but why do you keep reference the THOH's I didn't like?

*Nor* "Starship Poopers"... though Kang is always a good thing.

*Nor* "I Know What You Diddily-Did" (or whatever), particularly. I haven't seen "House of Whacks", though.

Yay, "The Devil and Homer Simpson"! Finally, you're getting to the *good* ones!

I'm not sure, but Homer's "Just smile and say yes" seems a bit recycled.

And again yay, "Bart Simpson's Dracula"!

Good ending. Marvin!

Well... what can I say? I may have been overly negative, but that's because most of the THOH specials you referenced weren't particular favourites of mine. The idea is absolutely brilliant (and makes me slightly jealous that I didn't think of it first), and the execution isn't bad, though the plot is a bit slight. (No, I can't think of anything better.) There also aren't very many laugh-out-loud lines, though Bart's "Stock's up!" and Frink's mentioning an ever-present dimensional rift came close. Still, recommendable.

I couldn't spot any particular errors. (Then again, I never pretended to understand the time paradox stuff in "The Restaurant at the End of the Universe".)

Someone should do fanart for it.

[Hellfish]

Always nice to see a new THOH script!

OK, I haven't read the Hitchhiker books in a while, so I might not be able to correct any mistakes. Just so you know.

Always nice to have a story reviewed.Thanks!

It should be "2 days' time".

There goes my english grades..

Funny opening, particularly Bart's line and the IOU's.

(Hmm... Lisa using the soda for an experiment, might this be foreshadowing? Heh heh.)

I didn't think of that... That's ANOTHER THOH reference!

In fact, this continues funny. Oooh, Restaurant at the End of the Universe! I really like the leaflet.

You missed the spaces before the parentheses in the bit where Lisa reads the leaflet.

Can I blame this on english not being my first language?

I'd love for this episode to be on TV, if only for the display of cosmic destruction.

Believe, I'd love that too..

Nice (if confusing) stuff with the time, particularly Homer's line about food that can be eaten in less than twenty minutes.

OK, some cases of missing the space after punctuation.

I don't know why, but that problem seems to haunt me..

Hmm, I *really* don't like that "Hex and the City" short, but I guess that can't be held against you.

*Nor* Stretch Dude and Clobber Girl. Sheesh, I like this story, but why do you keep reference the THOH's I didn't like?

*Nor* "Starship Poopers"... though Kang is always a good thing.

*Nor* "I Know What You Diddily-Did" (or whatever), particularly. I haven't seen "House of Whacks", though.

Hmm, House of Whacks is in the same THOH as Hex in the city so unless you walked out on an episode (Blasphemy! ) you should've seen it..

Yay, "The Devil and Homer Simpson"! Finally, you're getting to the *good* ones!

I'm not sure, but Homer's "Just smile and say yes" seems a bit recycled.

And again yay, "Bart Simpson's Dracula"!

Good ending. Marvin!

You don't think it was too 'specialized'? I wasn't sure how many would actually recognize him..

Well... what can I say? I may have been overly negative, but that's because most of the THOH specials you referenced weren't particular favourites of mine. The idea is absolutely brilliant (and makes me slightly jealous that I didn't think of it first), and the execution isn't bad, though the plot is a bit slight. (No, I can't think of anything better.) There also aren't very many laugh-out-loud lines, though Bart's "Stock's up!" and Frink's mentioning an ever-present dimensional rift came close. Still, recommendable.

Nonsense 1: Overly negative. Let's put it like this: 'I no longer fear hell, for I have been to emulator forums.'
Nonsense2: I read "Palmyra" and it tells me there's not many subjects you couldn't write an exciting story about.

I couldn't spot any particular errors. (Then again, I never pretended to understand the time paradox stuff in "The Restaurant at the End of the Universe".)

Someone should do fanart for it.

You think?

[c_nordlander]

Yeah, I actually did walk out on that episode. Can't remember why.

Also, if you've read "Palmyra", why don't you review it?

[Hellfish]

Because everytime I write a review either A)It makes no sense or B)Doesn't help at all.
But heck, I'll give it a shot, the story is worth it.