And that's the way the fourth wall crumbles [Shortie]

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And that's the way the fourth wall crumbles [Shortie]

Post by Hellfish » Wed Feb 16, 2005 12:47 pm

Got this Idea from an RPG and a movie forum and thought it would be fun to try. :)
Basically, the characters are aware of the author and format. Confused already? Wait til you've read it! :p

Just a little guidance:
Regular text = Environment descriptions, actions and such.
Quoted regular text = The character's lines.
Italic text = My lines.
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Re:And that's the way the fourth wall crumbles [Shortie]

Post by Bothead » Fri Feb 18, 2005 7:56 pm

Pfft.. Matt.. What does he know anymore? He hasn't really worked with you for hundred's of episodes!

"Yes he does, he has the executive decision on what gets aired and what doesn't! I don't like you talking that way about our dad."

... Matt was a stewardess?
Nice line. I like the idea and I know it was just a short demo. It just needs a storyline to work around.
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Re:And that's the way the fourth wall crumbles [Shortie]

Post by Hellfish » Sun Feb 20, 2005 10:09 pm

Thanks. Originally, the story was that it was one of my failed ideas but I think I' m gonna try to give it a decent story of its own.
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Re:And that's the way the fourth wall crumbles [Shortie]

Post by Dagdamor » Tue Feb 22, 2005 9:40 pm

Of course it's very small, but nice idea indeed!
Characterization is great, I look forward to see full version of this :)
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Re:And that's the way the fourth wall crumbles [Shortie]

Post by c_nordlander » Wed Mar 09, 2005 7:43 am

Great title! Very interesting idea as well. I don't remember ever seeing this in Simpsons fanfic, and I find it quite intriguing.

Boring technical stuff: You still have a few cases of forgetting the space after punctuation. Also, "surly" is an adjective, not an adverb, so "in a surly fashion" or something would be better. But those are really my only problems about it.

Mrs Crandall! *LOL*

I too love the "stewardess" line. Good ending.

So... quite short. On the one hand, that's probably good, because the joke might wear thin in a longer story. On the other hand, it's funny and makes me want more.

Hard to review this fic, since it's not really the usual fanfiction fare. But rest assured, it amused and intrigued me. Good work!
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