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review my story!

Postby c_s » Fri Mar 31, 2006 9:06 pm

Hello peoples! my names Cheryl but you can call me cher!  I like Simpsons, anime` (how do ya get that funny looking e with the line on top?) and lotsa stuff!
I'm putting my story here cos FanFiction Net took it down, even though I got someone to beta it like people told me to!  >:(

Anyways, heres my story, hope y'all enjoy!

opps, forgot to put it up! ^o^;
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Re: review my story!

Postby c_nordlander » Sat Apr 01, 2006 10:23 am

I do not normally read fan-fiction, as I find it an offence against copyright. Taking the intellectual property of a person and abusing it for licentious stories about prostitutes, established characters having homosexual relationships with each other, and -this is an actual example- stealing the identity of their long lost twins and then running for the highest office of state, seems to me to be the most flagrant case of what I would like to refer to as literary misappropriation.

This does not, howsoever, apply to your script, whose appeal I find wholly deconstructivist, even Ionescan(1) in its use of language and convention as concretist units added to the Aristotelian ones of plot and character. The intertextual allusions to pop culture such as Sailor Moon, Star Wars and Un chien andalou strike the tone for the narrator/signifier's Promethean struggle against his literary ancestry.(3)

I would enclose a more detailed review, but I have decided to save this for in the case I am allowed to write my thesis on your work. If you agree to this, please contact me by my Sorbonne academic webmail.

(1) E.g. La cantatrice chauve
(2) Poetics 4.2
(3) Harold Bloom, Anxiety of Influence
The noose draws tighter;
This is the end;
I'm a good fighter
But a bad friend;
I've played the traitor
Over and over;
I'm a good hater
But a bad lover.


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Re: review my story!

Postby c_s » Sat Apr 01, 2006 1:40 pm

Uhhhh I didnt understand youre post ???  you dont read fanfiction but you read mine?  does that mean you like it?  :D 
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Re: review my story!

Postby OARRIAGA2001 » Sun Apr 02, 2006 12:31 am

Let's ban his evil double! ;D
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Re: review my story!

Postby Meteorite » Sun Apr 02, 2006 12:55 am

Done!

Wait a..

*banned*
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<gkscotty|drawing> most people play Pokemon games with GameFAQs or a Pokéwiki open
<gkscotty|drawing> you seem to have TVTRopes :P


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Re: review my story!

Postby Casper » Sun Apr 02, 2006 1:13 pm

Well... I dont mean any offence but, when I read it first I laughed under my breath... :P

(And wow... is this my second post in the fan-fic area?)
(EDIT: and 2nd wow... 400th post)
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Re: review my story!

Postby Meteorite » Sun Apr 02, 2006 10:10 pm

Why would I be offended? It was meant to be bad. :)
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<gkscotty|drawing> most people play Pokemon games with GameFAQs or a Pokéwiki open
<gkscotty|drawing> you seem to have TVTRopes :P


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