The idea of this fanscript is to accomidate to the preferances of every genre. Sci-fi, [The Wolf]; Romance, [Bart and Flora], Mystery, [Teejay's Jaymart], and above all, comedy. I wanted to practice transitions, so writing this I thought would be good practice; how to smoothly switch from one genre to the next without awkwardness.The whole "mechanical wolf" seemed a bit too far-fetched for my liking, but that's probably just a personal opinion as opposed to a flaw. That part certainly did seem like the "climax" of the story though, so I would have liked to see it maybe ...more at the end, or drawn out a bit more.
Meh, they're always fighting about something. Except in the episode "Milhouse doesn't live here anymore", but that was a lone exception along with other bits and pieces. As Willie would say, "Brothers an' sisters are natural enimies! Like the English and the scots! And the japaneese and the scots! And Scots and other Scots! Derr Scots ruined scotland!"Seemed a bit out of place ...If Bart and Lisa had been fighting earlier on in the story, it would have fit in much better I think. Maybe the "was not, was so, was not" could be constituted as a fight though.
Say, what's your guess on the robbery? Just a question.
The whole "mechanical wolf" seemed a bit too far-fetched for my liking, but that's probably just a personal opinion as opposed to a flaw. That part certainly did seem like the "climax" of the story though, so I would have liked to see it maybe ...more at the end, or drawn out a bit more.
I was going to put it later, but when I realized it should come later, I was already far into writing it. If I were to take it out now, it would mess up a lot of things, so I'm leavin' it there.
I gotta check those marriage photos more carefully...