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- Trainee Technician
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Behold the first chapter of my Slumdog Millionaire parody. Fry is a contestant on Morbo's game show Cool Million, and is a mere two questions away from winning a cool million. Morbo, naturally, suspects that Fry is cheating. The rest of the story will be vaguely similar to the plot of the movie, except without any actual slumdogs. WARNING: Possible Fry/Leela shippiness. Or Fry/Amy shippiness. Or Fry/Mom. Or no shippiness at all.
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- Sector Control Officer
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Hmm; I like a lot of the Fry POV you've got going on here, DC. However, I feel the parody element could be played a tad more strongly. Just keep Fry IC as you've been doing and it should all come out well.
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The title parody is a bit easy, but good nevertheless.
Nice, compelling opening, though for some reason the style feels a bit dry and analytical, given the situation. Might just be me. Fry's thoughts are fairly awesome.
grasping the young man’s chin tightly with his clammy fingers
I think "tightly" isn't needed.
I like the torture joke.
Little to say due to its length, but a good opening, with many neat lines. Please keep writing.
The noose draws tighter;
This is the end;
I'm a good fighter
But a bad friend;
I've played the traitor
Over and over;
I'm a good hater
But a bad lover.
Elinor Wylie, "Peregrine"