OPINIONS - Simpson Moon Ep 2

[gkscotty]

Here it is. Warning - the latter part of the script has a much lower comedy : serious ratio than the rest... it's just the nature of the eps involved.

Also I'm highly concerned about Lisa's characterisation. She's in character (just) IMO, but could be better... all suggestions accepted! Please comment!

EDIT : Not read the first part? It's at http://www.simpworks.com/YaBBAttachments/spmoonp1.doc

[aoifestorm]

Yayy!  Episode 2!  I will read it soon, Steve.  I am looking forward to checking it out.

[Marco]

Eh, you already know what i think about it. I will post my comments later though, i need to do stuff.  :o

Psst... it's Steve

[Sheana_Molloy]

*lol*

[archonix]

Okay, if Steve is me... I assume Marco is Chris, Soren is Steve and I'm Hadisia.

ROB: Who am I?
EVERYONE: SHADDAP!

*coma*

Anyway, I'm reading it now... whoever I am...

[aoifestorm]

Sighh, I keep mixing everyone up on this board.  Sorry yet again Steve and Graham.

[c_nordlander]

@Graham: *LOL*

@Bart going to China, everything involving Tuxedo Corey, the shounen ai romance, the fact that the Popsicle Tower finally got some airtime, most everything: *LOL*

Hmmm... it's hard to give a balanced review. On one hand, I've got something of a hate-hate relationship with animé. (Sorry, but sooner or later it has to be said.) On the other hand, this is a very well-written and joke-packed script. Don't worry about it getting more dramatic, it's good. I actually felt the suspense quite some times. As for all the animé bits, not bad. (Was the Milhouse section out of Gundam Wing?)Arrivederci!

[archonix]

Alright, I'm taking this break in my heavy schedule to ha- oh wait, I have no schedule... oh well.

Right, first thoughts on this script: I'm not a Sailor Moon fan, a fact I've made abundantly clear whenever I get the chance.  Yet, I like this script.  I love the humour, which isn't as lacking as you make out, Steve, so you've nothing to worry about there.  I love the numerous injokes of both OFF and all the various animés featured from time to time, and I especially like the interactions between the four girls throughout.

THe continued references to "fanboys" and the Luna's refs to lall kinds of legal departments and "Central" are also iuncredibly fun.

Now, I'd say a lot mroe but I seem to have some kind of long review inhibitor, and I've run out of words... so...

:uhdrop:

[Marco-bash]

Okey, i just wrote a 3 pages review using a VGA 16 color screen (hencei don't see what i'm writing, blue on blue), then the browser thought well about eating my reply.
Since i'll be probably doing what my avatar does in about 5 minutes, i'd better wait again for the review. Sorry Steve

[gkscotty]

Eugh, that's horrible Marco... (everyone pray for Marco's net connection, it sucks tonight)

But 3 pages? I'm flattered. I hope some of it was negative. :-)

Thank you Graham and Christina. I'm glad you think the girls' personalities and interactions were good - and you know you've acheived something when Chris says she was almost moved.

And Gundam Wing? Nay, tis Evangelion.

[Sheana_Molloy]

Will post a review either tonight or tomorrow.  Am in the midst of reading it.

[aoifestorm]

 :) Hooray for Episode Two!  It was an enjoyable read, and I don't know what you were talking about Steve, it was funny as well.
There was lots of fun stuff. Among my favorite parts....  I liked the weird comment about space pirates and a crazy scientist moving in with Moe.  Was this an allusion to another anime series, or was this just a fun line?
I loved Bart as Ranma!  As soon as Homer mentioned going to China, I had a feeling things were going in this direction.  I thought Sherri was a good choice for Shampoo.  I loved Sideshow Bob turning into P-Chan too. Do you think you will keep using this theme in the next Simpson Moon installments? I would love to see Homer tuning into a giant panda, and Hans as Happosai.
The  blurb of the sex/violence sitcom was very funny. How could you have thought that this script lacked humor, Steve?
Luna asking for powers that are actually useful on behalf of Mercury was fun.  So was the scene where Luna talks to Barney and Moe in the bar.
I loved the use of the Popsicle Skyscraper as the scene for the big, final battle of this episode.
The choice of Mamoru Chiba as Kamen and Minako Aino as Sailor Venus/Sailor V were interesting.  I loved the line, "Mamoru leans on the balcony wall, and looks out over Tokyo. Godzilla is half-heartedly attacking, but nobody notices anymore".  I noticed the line in you sig recently, and  got a chuckle off of it, but now I know where it comes from.
Is there any reason why you made up new characters for Tuxedo Kamen/Sailor Venus instead of using characters from Springfield?  I'm just curious.
I really liked Episode 2 a lot.  It was really a fun script.  I hope we see Epsiode 3 sometime soon, Steve.  I think you are doing a great job with this theme.

[Sheana_Molloy]

Well, I finally finished reading it!  [rolls up sleeves]

Okay....all in all, this was a really groovy script.  It is definitely one of the weirdest things I've read in a while, but that's mainly because I'm such a novice when it comes to anime/manga that I didn't get half the references.  It got quite funny at many parts, and I enjoyed it.

HOMER : Well, at least Bart’s still as American as apple pie and evil faceless corporations.

If this quote wasn't so darn true and funny, I'd bop you one for it.

Apu looks out over his counter. A black paw reaches up onto the counter and leaves a $20 bill there.

LUNA : You didn’t see nuthin’.
APU : That is correct, small black talking cat.

Apu rocks hard.  Note:  The use of the 'Cat Fight' game was quite good, but the "skank" and "bitch" just seemed a bit too adult for it.

Other things:  loved the bit with the tanks and poor Hans Moleman; was heartily confused by the bit with Milhouse in the robot and the others talking to him, was at first skeeved out and then quite amused by the "thing" between Dolphite and Kearneyite, and the battle at the end was interesting.  Also liked Godzilla.

Good script. :naughty:

[gkscotty]

There was lots of fun stuff. Among my favorite parts....  I liked the weird comment about space pirates and a crazy scientist moving in with Moe.  Was this an allusion to another anime series, or was this just a fun line?

That was me trying to ref Tenchi Muyo.

I loved Bart as Ranma!  As soon as Homer mentioned going to China, I had a feeling things were going in this direction.  I thought Sherri was a good choice for Shampoo.  I loved Sideshow Bob turning into P-Chan too. Do you think you will keep using this theme in the next Simpson Moon installments? I would love to see Homer tuning into a giant panda, and Hans as Happosai.

I don;t plan to make them a central part of the story, but Panda Homer will definitely be soon. And though he won't feature at all, I think I'd prefer Grampa as Happosai.

The  blurb of the sex/violence sitcom was very funny. How could you have thought that this script lacked humor, Steve?

Really, I was referring to the part after they enter the tower there. Humour drops off a lot compared to previous scenes.

I loved the use of the Popsicle Skyscraper as the scene for the big, final battle of this episode.

I'm not sure how good that battle actually is though. Lisa picking up the cane bothers me.

Is there any reason why you made up new characters for Tuxedo Kamen/Sailor Venus instead of using characters from Springfield?  I'm just curious.

They're not new characters - Mamoru Chiba and Minako Aino are the Japanese names of the actual Sailor Moon characters. Why are they in it? All will be revealed.

[Marco]

Well, i'm back, my puter is now laying aside me piece to piece, and the fan is giving me a headache

Now, for SimpMoon:
It's a script that obviously bases itself on the readers knowledge of SM and other famous anime in general, but the strenght of it lies in two basilar things: it keeps always a vein of classic, hilarious Simpsonic humour (punch lines, subtle and not background jokes, and some extensions of charachterization), and the Anime referred humour is special in its way, not hermetic: That is, even if one doesn't know anything about Evangelion or Ranma (the latter was my case) it's impossible not to laugh to Milhouse being scolded by various weird holograms, or Bob transmuting into a little pig (
PIG (infuriated) : Squeeeeee! (throws switchblade at ground) Squeeee! (sadly, sits down) Squee… This had me ROTFL ).
About Lisas charachterization: to me her out-of-charachter bits (mostly the romantic swipes) are a great way of making fun of the charateristic anime girl in general, Usagi in particular. It's part of the parody, and the fact Lisa is doing it, it has even more value. In the final scene she may act a bit strange, but i still think that is ok. Lisa went berserk for a bit, it already happened.

And now i can skip to the obvious part of the review... ah-hem:

*ROTFL*

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p.s.: For the anime-bashers or understimators in general: It's easy to underrate the manga animation in general, when you just look at the same commercialized fan-service filled crap the TV stations export to the world to get easy viewers.
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