All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

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All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

Post by missy_misery » Thu Nov 01, 2007 1:01 am

Okay, just announcing I, too, am throwing my hat into the ring this year - that's my working title.  Fic should be out before US Thanksgiving.
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Re: All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

Post by missy_misery » Wed Nov 14, 2007 6:51 pm

Phew!  As stated below, first fourth is finished, and will complete another fourth today with luck and the rest this weekend.  Will send to beta by the end of the week and, with any sort of luck, have the finished version posted here by next Wed.
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Re: All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

Post by missy_misery » Wed Nov 28, 2007 9:35 pm

And here is the first draft.  Sent off to Dave for beta and will have a final project posted on Wednesday.
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Re: All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

Post by missy_misery » Wed Dec 05, 2007 6:53 am

I failed at getting a beta for this, so I hand-edited the puppy. Guess it's good to go now.

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Beginnings:
Leela  is sitting in the kitchen, talking to the devil
The Professor invents something useful
Aliens Attack!

Middles:
A small incident explodes into something world-shaking

Ends:
Leela is left holding the baby
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Re: All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

Post by c_nordlander » Fri Dec 07, 2007 9:53 pm

Typo: "draws" should be "drawers"

Touching and downbeat without being depressing, with good performances by all the characters, and generally feels 100% like the show. I hardly need to point out that it's well-written, though it feels a bit verbose in places, particularly around the start. I enjoyed seeing the Robot Devil again. He shines in this story. The ending is awesome.

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I feel happy for reading this.

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Re: All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

Post by missy_misery » Sun Dec 09, 2007 5:23 am

Pleah, I knew I'd miss something  :P  Thanks so much, Chris!  I was wondering if I was headed too much in the direction of melodrama, I'm glad it didn't. 
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I'm pleased you like this one - I've still got about three more fics to read this weekend before tossing in my thoughts on them later. 
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Re: All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

Post by Kif White » Tue Dec 18, 2007 9:30 am

Nicely written story (And I have to say, I like verbose ;D) with good solid characterisations, several unique ideas and top notch characterisation, nice emotional moments, with a good smattering of humour throughout. The rest I'll put in...
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Re: All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

Post by missy_misery » Fri Dec 21, 2007 3:39 am

Thanks, Kif!
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Re: All Full Of Stars (AKA: My Fic)

Post by Archonix » Fri Dec 21, 2007 9:55 am

Nah, the Robot Devil was fine. It makes me wonder, actually, if there would have been more antagonism between RD and Leela in a longer-running series.
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