Review - Burn Flanders, Burn
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Review - Burn Flanders, Burn
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Re: Review - Burn Flanders, Burn
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Well, how to put this. The idea behind this (Flanders worrying about going to hell, and his sons) is quite good, and not something that has really been addressed on the show, even though it fits his character. However, I think it is spoilt by your making Flanders a bit out of character. Yes, he is very religious, but he is also mild-mannered to the point of repression, and quite tolerant. I guess he could get a bit shriller when he feels threatened, but you don't really show that development.
On the whole, while the plot holds together well, there isn't much meat on it. Only a few jokes entertained me, Homer is a bit of a jerkass (not too horrible, though), and generally, it feels rather post-Season 10, with pointlessly whacky jokes (such as Lisa in the fridge). The ending resolves things rather well, though I'd rather see Flanders feeling a bit more at peace.
My rating: D
Well, how to put this. The idea behind this (Flanders worrying about going to hell, and his sons) is quite good, and not something that has really been addressed on the show, even though it fits his character. However, I think it is spoilt by your making Flanders a bit out of character. Yes, he is very religious, but he is also mild-mannered to the point of repression, and quite tolerant. I guess he could get a bit shriller when he feels threatened, but you don't really show that development.
On the whole, while the plot holds together well, there isn't much meat on it. Only a few jokes entertained me, Homer is a bit of a jerkass (not too horrible, though), and generally, it feels rather post-Season 10, with pointlessly whacky jokes (such as Lisa in the fridge). The ending resolves things rather well, though I'd rather see Flanders feeling a bit more at peace.
My rating: D
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Went to the good school
Left with honours
Brand new tycoon
Sitting with a harpoon
-- Mother Mother, "Business Man"
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