My Fan Script
FUTURAMA
"The King and Fry"
(Starts off with us Seeing a special news report then Linda and Morbo)
Linda: Hi, Im Linda (whatever her last name is) and today we have some great news dont we Morbo.
Morbo: Pathetic Humans and their News, when Morbos Planet comes to destroy all humans you wont be smiling.
Linda: Oh hahahahaha, Morbo your so funny some times.
(Scene Cuts to them all at the meeting table with Professor Farnsworth Standing up.)
Professor: Horrific News Everyone I have reason to believe that something big is coming our way.
Fry: Thats what she said.
Leela: Fry shut up, now Professor what makes you believe that something BIG is coming towards us.
Professor: Well I was using my smell-o-scope when a peculiar smell came in to view.
Bender: I think the old man fell of his rocking chair, I know Im a robot an all but Im pretty something cant come into view with your noise.
Professor: I did not say that you piece of talking garbage.
Bender: Yes you did.
Professor: Fine, Im sick of this, Zoidberg no food for today.
Zoidberg: ( Sounding Sad )ooooooohhhh
Professor: Anyway, where was I.
Bender: The smell-o-scope, the big thing coming our way.
Fry: Thats what she said.
Professor: Oh yes now I remember, It was a smell Ive never smelt it before something not from around here.
Fry: Did it smell like a big ball of garbage.
Professor: Oh heavens no, and anyway Zoidberg sitting right there.
Zoidberg: When I thought I was down they just keep bringing me lower and lower.
Amy: Professor what could it be.
Professor: I dont know, I just dont know.
Commercial Break
(Scene Cuts to Fry, Leela and Bender talking around the Planet Express ship)
Fry: Okay this time I know it the old man has totally lost it.
Leela: No, he hasnt what if hes really telling the truth what if this is something that could change the world.
Bender: Well if something does happen, I call the bomb shelter.
Leela: We have a bomb shelter and why was I never informed of this all those times we were in danger and could have gone down there for safety.
Fry: What gives Bender, what gives, where is this shelter anyway?
Bender: Its behind the empty locker over there. (points to the bunch of lockers and all there names on the lockers except one plain nameless locker.)
Fry: I always wondered what that locker was for, Bender how did you know about the bomb shelter anyway?
Bender: I used to play hide and seek with a friend down there when I was young I wondered what happened to that guy.
(Scene cuts to them Walking into the locker and down stairs when they finally reach this big door.)
Leela: Bender, whats the combination?
Bender: There is no combination.
Fry: What do you mean?
(Bender hits the wall next to him and door opens up to another bunch of stairs.)
Leela: Wow thats pretty handy.
(They walk down the stairs to find another Vault type door.)
Leela: Alright whats the combination.
Bender: 1, 2,3
Leela: So your telling me after all secrets tunnels and secret doors that the combination is 1,2,3.
Bender: Yep
( Leela types in the combination and the door opens and some guy runs out (His name is Bruno))
Bruno: Oh Bender, you finally found me that must have been the longest hide and go seek game ever.
Bender: Oh yeah hide and go seek. (like hes obviously forgot.)
Fry: Who is this guy?
Bender: Oh this is
(Gets interrupted by Bruno.)
Bruno: Well were best friends of course who do you think I was, Bender wouldnt be searching for me for years if he wasnt my best friend.
(Fry looks down as hes sad)
Fry: Oh, okay.
(Scene cuts to thousands of Ships flying through space with Earth in view.)
Commercial Break
(Scene starts with Fry and Bender sitting on their couch when the turn on the T.V to see a broadcaster getting shot at and explosions everywhere.)
Broadcaster: Alien attack, the Morbonians have come to take back their king The Morbonians are saying that their King has been lost for many years.
(Scene Cuts back to the couch)
Leela: (Yelling) Everyone you better get in here
(You see everyone come running into the room)
Amy: Whats going on?
Leela: Alien attack.
Amy: Again thats like the third one this week.
(Scene cuts back to the T.V.)
Linda: So why are they attacking us?
Broadcaster: They say that they received word that their king was here on earth.
Linda: Thats weird what do think of that Morbo
.
(Silence)
Linda: Morbo
( Scene Cuts to everyone watching the T.V. )
Leela: Alright, everyone get in the bomb shelter.
Professor: What Bomb shelter?
Bender: You know the one behind the locker.
Professor: Thats not a Bomb Shelter thats Scruffys Janitor Closest.
Leela: Whats with all the secrecy?
Scruffy: Scruffy doesnt know, kind of makes Scruffy feel like a secret agent.
Fry: Alright Whatever lets go into the Janitors Bomb Shelter or whatever it is.
(Scene cuts to everyone running into the Shelter.)
Fry: How come their King has just contacted them now?
Professor: Now I think this is all my fault.
Amy: Professor how could this possible be your fault?
Professor: Well a couple weeks back someone approached me to make a machine that could send messages to far away distances that a machine has ever been able to be reached. I called it a Distance Machine. Plus, It would only takes a couple minutes to reach the Morbonians Planet.
Bender: Who was this guy?
Professor: His name was Morbo.
Fry: The Guy from T.V.?
Professor: Yes, that Morbo.
Leela: But I dont get it, how do you know that Morbo is the Morbonians King.
Professor: When ever the Morbonians elect a king his name is changed to the name of their species so Morbonian but for short Morbo.
Bender: What are we going to do?
Professor: Im going to go and save this planet.
Bruno: Ill help you.
(Everyone starts clapping and yelling)
Professor: Lets go save planet earth.
(You see the professor walking like and inch per step(Everyones still yelling yeah and the longer it takes to reach the door the softer the yelling gets) Finally you see bender pick the professor up and throw him through the door.)
Bender: So what do we do now.
Fry: Anybody up for a game of Monopoly
Everyone: Im in.
(Scene cuts to Morbo getting ready and packing to leave when he turns on the T.V.)
Broadcaster: The attack is over the Morbonians are retreating.
Morbo: What no this cant be, NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO.
Broadcaster: No warning they just dropped their weapons and are leaving Im so confused
(Scene cuts back to the Janitors Bomb Sheltor Thing, when theres a knock on the door.)
Bender: Who is it?
Professor: Its me you idiot.
(Bender opens the door)
Fry: Did you do it, did you save Earth?
Professor: mmmmmmmm Oh yes know I remember, Yes I did.
Amy: How did you do it?
Professor: Well, first I made another Distance Machine, then I called the Morbonians home planet that their king being on Earth was a misunderstanding and that he was on the planet of Omircron Persei 100 the furthest planet from here. 50 years to be correct.
Fry: Wait where is Bruno.
Professor: Oh Bruno, oh I told him that Bender was playing hide and go seek and that he was hiding on one of the Morbonians ships.
Bender: Oh thank God he was really starting to annoy me.
Fry: Wait so If I got this right the Morbonians are just going to realize its a lie after they kill everyone on Omicron Persei 100 and then they will come back and kill everyone on Earth in 100 years.
Professor:I know and by then hopefully I will be dead.
Leela: What about all those innocent People that will die.
Professor:ZZZZZZZZZZZZ(Sleeping)
The King and Fry
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The King and Fry
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Re: The King and Fry
Note: I don't think Linda's last name has ever been mentioned on the show.
Typo: "with your noise" should be "nose", and "when the turn on the T.V" should be "when they".
Good title, though a bit misleading (since Fry isn't really the central character in this story). I quite like the set-up here (I always thought it would be funny if Morbo finally got a plotline dedicated to him), and there are several giggle-worthy jokes (meeting Bruno in the shelter, Bender throwing the Professor, and many others). Nobody's out of character.
On the downside, the script format is somewhat awkward. I know it doesn't have to be professional, but it could be made easier to read. While I don't think the characters are out of character, like I said, their dialogue feels rather generic. Their individual voices don't really come through, except in some cases. Perhaps most damningly, this script is *very* short, and the ending is very anticlimactic, almost like you got tired of writing it and decided to wrap it up just when the plot was finally getting underway. I would much rather have seen the Professor and the rest outsmart the Morbonians, rather than just hear about it afterwards. Also, the very end is nearly ripped straight off "A Big Ball of Garbage".
If this is one of your first scripts, I think it shows a lot of promise. You've got some feel for the characters and can come up with really good jokes. Just aim at a more complete plot arc in the future.
My rating: C+
Typo: "with your noise" should be "nose", and "when the turn on the T.V" should be "when they".
Good title, though a bit misleading (since Fry isn't really the central character in this story). I quite like the set-up here (I always thought it would be funny if Morbo finally got a plotline dedicated to him), and there are several giggle-worthy jokes (meeting Bruno in the shelter, Bender throwing the Professor, and many others). Nobody's out of character.
On the downside, the script format is somewhat awkward. I know it doesn't have to be professional, but it could be made easier to read. While I don't think the characters are out of character, like I said, their dialogue feels rather generic. Their individual voices don't really come through, except in some cases. Perhaps most damningly, this script is *very* short, and the ending is very anticlimactic, almost like you got tired of writing it and decided to wrap it up just when the plot was finally getting underway. I would much rather have seen the Professor and the rest outsmart the Morbonians, rather than just hear about it afterwards. Also, the very end is nearly ripped straight off "A Big Ball of Garbage".
If this is one of your first scripts, I think it shows a lot of promise. You've got some feel for the characters and can come up with really good jokes. Just aim at a more complete plot arc in the future.
My rating: C+
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