Review- "The Opposite of Something"

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Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by Dana » Mon Apr 29, 2002 12:28 am

This is an episode that I wrote involving a "Seinfeld" parody.

It's my first attempt and I did it without script writing software, so let me apologize up front for the formatting.

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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by gkscotty » Mon Apr 29, 2002 1:03 am

A bit of a sudden ending, but otherwise extremely good. There are some genuinely funny LOL moments here...

LISA
Oh cheer up Dad, at least you'll leave
here knowing your money is going
to brighten some poor
unfortunates life.

HOMER
Yeah, but now, unfortunately I'm poor.


Very good. :-) I really enjoyed it, and hope to see more sometime.
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by Archonix » Mon Apr 29, 2002 8:00 am

I'm reading it at the moment.  A bit busy with university, buut what I've seen so far is great. ;D
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by Karsten_Thiel » Mon Apr 29, 2002 5:10 pm

Not bad. Very good, in fact. Not exactly the best of plots, but it did have lots of great lines. The entire opening scene was a classic, and the "Get OUT!" scene had me ROTFL. I hope we'll see more stories from you soon. :)
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Post by c_nordlander » Mon Apr 29, 2002 5:40 pm

To repeat the tritest critique ever: this one should be on the show! Back in the good days, when they still did actual humour. I agree with the others here: hilarious (especially the church scenes and Homer's TV ranting), good metahumour, perhaps a bit abrupt in the end. I'm not much of a Seinfeld fan either, but I laughed at it anyway. This is one good fanscript.
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by aoifestorm » Mon Apr 29, 2002 5:42 pm

:) This was a good script, Dana.   It had a lot of funny gags and I liked the appearance of the Seinfeld crew.
I especially enjoyed the first act, with Monte Carlo Night at the church.
My favorite line.. Lovejoy:  Oh please Lord, just once let me replace the pennance of prayer with the joy of a crucifixion.  ;D
I got lots of laughs from this script.  I hope we see new ones from you soon, Dana.
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by Archonix » Mon Apr 29, 2002 6:12 pm

Yeah I liked that line as well, alongside this:

"I am evil Homer! I am evil Homer!" ;D  Love it!
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by Tony_Baritone » Mon Apr 29, 2002 9:33 pm

A little padding from Seinfeld, but overall a very high hit-to-miss ratio regarding jokes.  This really does hit everything:  jokes, satire and characterization.  The Seinfeld parody was very well done, Homer was fantastic, the Flanders segments were terrific.  One of the best comedy scripts I've seen in a while.
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by Archonix » Tue Apr 30, 2002 10:27 am

Well I've pretty much finished reading it now.  I cna't add much more than anyone else has said; characterisation is great, plot is great and it really could be worth of production if only they were willing to accept such things.
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by SirMustapha » Tue Apr 30, 2002 11:23 am

Fun! Fun! FUUUN!!! ;D

Good work, Dana. You script is awesome: Highly recommendable. Thanks for making my day happier!
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by Dana » Tue Apr 30, 2002 1:48 pm

Wow!

Thank you all for your kind words and helpful pointers.

I've really enjoyed getting this idea out of my head and into the computer. I've already started tinkering with the final act, adding a little more heart to this story because, frankly, Seinfeld might have left poor Neddy and his crying kids to just carry on, but not likely in a Simpsons episode...at least not one I'm writing!
I'll post the new changes and additions soon...that is as soon as my wife stops threatening to stab me in the heart with a pen if I don't get off that BLANKETY_BLANK COMPUTER!!

Thanks again everyone.

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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by Archonix » Tue Apr 30, 2002 10:13 pm

Ahh, the life of the married man... :)

I wonder if Chris will threaten to stab me with a pen?

Anyway, yes, I think I can speak for everyone when I say keep on writing. ;D  Do you think we'll see more stories out of your brain at any time?  If your'e not sure, we relatively painless have ways of extracting them... :naughty:
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by c_nordlander » Sat May 04, 2002 10:48 am

You may have to hide all the pens, Graham...
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Re: Review- "The Opposite of Something"

Post by Jeremy Brownstein » Sun Nov 24, 2002 5:19 am

Great ending,

"Me work in TV?"

Made me laugh out loud; rang very true.

I loved the tightness of the script, from the Osbournes bracketing (couch / ending) to the Newmanesque Flanders greeting by Homer.  

Only problem is the bulk of the visual animated humor seems to be in the casino scene -- after that it's mostly all dialogue.  Funny as hell,  yes, but this is Simpsons!

Great job nonetheless.

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