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@Fernie: Finally got around to listening to your piece. I enjoyed it a lot and have listened to it a few times now. A nice mixture between the dramatic and the restful, and simply very nice and melodic. The track titles help me piece together the story as well. As a laywoman, I can't really tell what's rough about the sound, but I trust you to know how to fix it. In short, very good work; I'm very happy that you share it with us.
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I'm really thankful for the comments! I know that finishing this work will be quite a challenge, so every bit of encouragement I get will be put to good use.
I already started working on a new part of the album, but I found it too sketchy and rudimentary to share, so once it's in better shape, I'll put it up.

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Consider yourself motivated by my desire to listen to it. 

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More Joker/Sophie. Nothing untoward is happening, they're just making out.
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Hi so this was going to be the second half of my story haha nope it's the second chapter who knows how many are left
Seriously though, probably three or four more chapters.
Seriously though, probably three or four more chapters.

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You did a really good job with the poses, Chris! That's not an easy one to pull off, and they look very convincing. Their faces look good too. Overall, this is one of the best pics you've shown us yet.
I love the new bit of the story, Alex, mostly due to how you write Rainbow Dash. She's already a super fun character, and you know how to highlight her funniest traits while still keeping her charismatic. It's not that I'm trying to influence your creative decisions, but I enjoy it when Meteorite interacts with her.
I guess I'm gonna throw in my own creation in here as well: this is another fragment of the novel I'm working on. There's a lot of context missing, and several readers were confused by the apparent switch to first person halfway through, so here: the whole story is written in first person from the perspective of Carol, and, for reasons explained elsewhere in the story, she's also a not-quite-omniscient narrator. The part I actually wanted to show starts at the end of page 2, but I got greedy and included a bit before that too. There are eight main characters in this story, and I'm starting to really sink my teeth into who they are and flesh out their relationships, so I guess I wanted validation.
I love the new bit of the story, Alex, mostly due to how you write Rainbow Dash. She's already a super fun character, and you know how to highlight her funniest traits while still keeping her charismatic. It's not that I'm trying to influence your creative decisions, but I enjoy it when Meteorite interacts with her.

I guess I'm gonna throw in my own creation in here as well: this is another fragment of the novel I'm working on. There's a lot of context missing, and several readers were confused by the apparent switch to first person halfway through, so here: the whole story is written in first person from the perspective of Carol, and, for reasons explained elsewhere in the story, she's also a not-quite-omniscient narrator. The part I actually wanted to show starts at the end of page 2, but I got greedy and included a bit before that too. There are eight main characters in this story, and I'm starting to really sink my teeth into who they are and flesh out their relationships, so I guess I wanted validation.
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Thank you for the high praise, Fernie. I'm not gonna lie: two full-figure characters in one hour is almost beyond my capacity, but hearing that I'm improving is extremely motivating.
@Alex: looking forward to seeing where this story is going! As others have said, Rainbow Dash is very in character in this scene, and the writing and dialogue continues to be good. Meteorite wanting Dash's approval is good writing: it's one of those little things that seem irrational on paper, but that actually influence quite a lot of our lives. "The most pegasus pegasus" is still great.
@Fernie: hard to really comment without having read the surrounding story, but you have plenty of good writing here, especially in the scene from Carol's point of view. And playing around with POVs is totally cool, it just threw me a bit.
Also, a lot of Carol's new friends' names seem familiar...
@Alex: looking forward to seeing where this story is going! As others have said, Rainbow Dash is very in character in this scene, and the writing and dialogue continues to be good. Meteorite wanting Dash's approval is good writing: it's one of those little things that seem irrational on paper, but that actually influence quite a lot of our lives. "The most pegasus pegasus" is still great.
@Fernie: hard to really comment without having read the surrounding story, but you have plenty of good writing here, especially in the scene from Carol's point of view. And playing around with POVs is totally cool, it just threw me a bit.

Also, a lot of Carol's new friends' names seem familiar...
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Just a tiny bit of what I wrote for my upcoming (?) Seymour and Edna fic, been working on a bit more lately, if everything goes right I'll post a part in some days
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1K9y ... sp=sharing

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1K9y ... sp=sharing

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Yeah, I guess they should be. This is a reworking of a very, very old story, which I seem to have published here in... [i[some[/i] state. I'm hoping that this is the final and definitive version, 'cause, seriously, enough is enough. The writing history of that novel is kinda cursed, since the original idea dates from almost 20 years ago, and thus the story was plagued with terrible decisions I made as a teenager. I'm making some significant changes, and trying to get deeper into the essences of these characters, and I think I'm succeeding.c_nordlander wrote: ↑Mon Apr 20, 2020 7:25 pmAlso, a lot of Carol's new friends' names seem familiar...
EDIT: regarding K's fic, as I mentioned in chat, I'm really eager to see where the story is going. The writing and characterisation are very, very good.
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@Carol: to start with, this is a *great* opening for a story. Most parents would draw the line at trying to ruin their child's wedding, but not Agnes. The writing is good, and you got the tone right for both Agnes and Seymour. The mention of Sheldon Skinner provides a bit of backstory about the Skinner family, something we're not overly spoiled with. Also, I'm positive to Skinner/Krabappel content in general (I don't ship them as such, but I disliked the way the show broke them up).
One punctuation nitpick I forgot to mention in chat (and don't feel that I'm singling you out; this is something a lot of new writers mess up): you treat the dialogue tag ("he said" etc.) as a separate sentence, which it isn't. So in the following snippet
Dialogue tags should be distinguished from when the dialogue line is followed by something that *is* a separate sentence. Take this hypothetical example:
Apologies for the long explanation; I just figured I'd get it out of the way early on. Like I said, great set-up and good characterisation and writing; if you write more, I'll look forward to reading it.
One punctuation nitpick I forgot to mention in chat (and don't feel that I'm singling you out; this is something a lot of new writers mess up): you treat the dialogue tag ("he said" etc.) as a separate sentence, which it isn't. So in the following snippet
"she finally answered" doesn't stand on its own, but follows on the dialogue. Therefore, the dialogue line shouldn't end with a full stop, but with a comma, and "she" shouldn't be capitalised. This is how it should look:“Go. Just don’t think we’ll be the same after today.” She finally answered
If the dialogue tag starts with a proper name ("Agnes," for example), the name is of course capitalised, but you should still end the dialogue line with a comma. Likewise, even if the dialogue ends with a question mark or an exclamation mark, you shouldn't capitalise "he" or "she".“Go. Just don’t think we’ll be the same after today,” she finally answered
Dialogue tags should be distinguished from when the dialogue line is followed by something that *is* a separate sentence. Take this hypothetical example:
Here, the bit after the dialogue isn't a "she said"-style tag, but a separate sentence of description; therefore, I end the dialogue with a full stop, since it's a finished sentence.“Go. Just don’t think we’ll be the same after today.” She fiddled with her knitting, not looking at Seymour.
Apologies for the long explanation; I just figured I'd get it out of the way early on. Like I said, great set-up and good characterisation and writing; if you write more, I'll look forward to reading it.
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Thanks for the revisions, Chris. Like I said, if this was written in my mother tongue the grammar choices I made would make more sense, but since it's not, it's good to have someone to correct those.
I'm glad you guys liked it, I'm probably posting it on a thread of its own once I'm finished with more pages
I'm glad you guys liked it, I'm probably posting it on a thread of its own once I'm finished with more pages


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Glad to hear I wasn't being overbearing.
Sounds like a good plan!mushroombossa wrote: ↑Wed Apr 22, 2020 1:13 am I'm glad you guys liked it, I'm probably posting it on a thread of its own once I'm finished with more pages![]()
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Fine background, and you've got an immense amount of character into their faces. Really feels like something you'd see on the show (if they aged up the characters... oh well, a girl can dream).
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Some Venture Brothers fanart: Triana Orpheus having visions of an evil version of herself or something. Tangentially related to Star Wars in honour of the date, since it was inspired by Rey seeing visions of her Dark Side self in "The Rise of Skywalker". Also related to my VB fic Raven Must Die, where Triana fights a demonic double of herself, though this exact scene didn't happen in the story.
I didn't actually intend for evil!Triana to come off as quite so... grabby, but I saw the opportunity for added creepiness and couldn't turn it down.
Regarding evil!Triana having a hairstyle more like the canonical one has on the show: I have this fuzzy headcanon that Triana started growing her hair out and wearing impractical robes once she left home to become a sorceress, because of course she would. evil!Triana comes from a dimension where the supernatural is commonplace, thus, while she's still a powerful sorceress, she would never have gone through the same conceptual breakthrough, and would still wear mundane clothes and a more 2000s-fashionable hairstyle.
I didn't actually intend for evil!Triana to come off as quite so... grabby, but I saw the opportunity for added creepiness and couldn't turn it down.
Regarding evil!Triana having a hairstyle more like the canonical one has on the show: I have this fuzzy headcanon that Triana started growing her hair out and wearing impractical robes once she left home to become a sorceress, because of course she would. evil!Triana comes from a dimension where the supernatural is commonplace, thus, while she's still a powerful sorceress, she would never have gone through the same conceptual breakthrough, and would still wear mundane clothes and a more 2000s-fashionable hairstyle.
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