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OPINIONS: Love Among the Bruins (Futurama)

Posted: Sat Dec 10, 2016 9:20 pm
by c_nordlander
After Leela gets burned on a horrible part-time job, she decides to break into the Romanticorp factory to save the exploited Lovey Bears from being turned into stuffed toys.

I'm not quite happy with the plot towards the end,
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Still, might be worth a read. Not the final draft, so tell me if anything can be improved!

Note: the musical at the start is obviously a Warhammer 40,000 reference, but the Roman guy referring to Earth as "fabled Terra" really was just a coincidence.

Script format; comedy (though it ended up a little more dramatic than I first intended).

EDIT: Also, I should credit Graham for coming up with a few plot ideas.

Re: OPINIONS: Love Among the Bruins (Futurama)

Posted: Sun Dec 11, 2016 10:05 am
by missy_misery
Saving for reviewing next week!

Re: OPINIONS: Love Among the Bruins (Futurama)

Posted: Wed Dec 14, 2016 10:25 pm
by gkscotty
Very enjoyable! Leela was cool, and the Fry and Bender stuff was funny as well. Great villain.
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Re: OPINIONS: Love Among the Bruins (Futurama)

Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2016 9:39 am
by c_nordlander
You pretty much voiced all the problems I had with the fic (disconnected first act, the bears not being very interesting, the
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so no disagreement there. We'll see if I come up with some way to fix them. Also, glad you liked it otherwise!

Thank you for reading.

Re: OPINIONS: Love Among the Bruins (Futurama)

Posted: Wed Dec 21, 2016 5:05 am
by missy_misery
I actually don't mind the lack of development on Leela
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Re: OPINIONS: Love Among the Bruins (Futurama)

Posted: Wed Dec 21, 2016 12:50 pm
by SirMustapha
I completely forgot to comment on this. In fact, I wrote a reply, and forgot to submit it. Days ago.

Either way, I can't add any more criticism other than what Steve said, but I really enjoyed this story nonetheless, and I think it's worth it to iron out those little kinks. This is really good stuff.