Kenneth steps up to the challenge.
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Kenneth steps up to the challenge.
I think I'll enter this competition too for once. It interests me for sure. Not sure about ideas yet, I'll get back once I've mulled over the options some more. :)
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"Know the conflict within before facing the conflict without."
Now Watching: Babylon 5 - Season 3
Now Playing: Dragon Age Origins: Awakening, Pokemon Heart Gold
Now Reading: Catch 22
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Re: Kenneth steps up to the challenge.
First Draft is up. Remember, this is not final, I might make some adjustments to it later. Hope anybody who chooses to read it enjoys it. 

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"Know the conflict within before facing the conflict without."
Now Watching: Babylon 5 - Season 3
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Now Reading: Catch 22
"Know the conflict within before facing the conflict without."
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Now Reading: Catch 22
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Re: Kenneth steps up to the challenge.
Touching, thought-provoking and VERY sci-fi - very Kif. Good stuff, man - I couldn't see many flaws worth changing.
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Creator of the Waving Universe
Crack!Fic, The Marge Simpson Way: "Just then, Sir Lancelot rode up on a white horse and saved Joan of Arc. They got married and lived in a spaceship. The end." - Tales from the Public Domain, "Hot Child In The City"
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Re: Kenneth steps up to the challenge.
Okay, final version is ready now. Enjoy! 

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- Kenneth White
"Know the conflict within before facing the conflict without."
Now Watching: Babylon 5 - Season 3
Now Playing: Dragon Age Origins: Awakening, Pokemon Heart Gold
Now Reading: Catch 22
"Know the conflict within before facing the conflict without."
Now Watching: Babylon 5 - Season 3
Now Playing: Dragon Age Origins: Awakening, Pokemon Heart Gold
Now Reading: Catch 22
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Re: Kenneth steps up to the challenge.
Typoes: "Fry is not only being send"; and "his rather said" EDIT: Fixed now.
Excellent (and scary) plot, clever title, and just generally very good use of the characters and the story elements. I was especially happy to see again. Good job!
Excellent (and scary) plot, clever title, and just generally very good use of the characters and the story elements. I was especially happy to see again. Good job!

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