OPINIONS - Bart Wars
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OPINIONS - Bart Wars
Since the dawn of time (or at least the dawn of "Simpsons" fanfiction), there has been the prophecy of the one who shall bring a "Star Wars" parody to the SFWC...
Today (or tonight, depending on which time zone you live in), this prophecy has been fulfilled...
Suffering from a severe case of Pre-Episode II Great Expectations Syndrome, I have decided to finally start writing aforementioned Simpsonic "Star Wars" parody (seeing as someone had to do it sooner or later). More will be added soon. All kinds of feedback will be greatly appreciated. Enjoy!
(Disclaimer: The prophecy mentioned above is made up, and not meant to indicate that I'm some sort of "Chosen One". Not that I'd mind being worshipped... )
Today (or tonight, depending on which time zone you live in), this prophecy has been fulfilled...
Suffering from a severe case of Pre-Episode II Great Expectations Syndrome, I have decided to finally start writing aforementioned Simpsonic "Star Wars" parody (seeing as someone had to do it sooner or later). More will be added soon. All kinds of feedback will be greatly appreciated. Enjoy!
(Disclaimer: The prophecy mentioned above is made up, and not meant to indicate that I'm some sort of "Chosen One". Not that I'd mind being worshipped... )
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Re: OPINIONS - Bart Wars
Yay! Maggie!
Uh... :uhdrop: I'll be back with more after I've uh, read a few others... uh... right.
*bows*
Farewell, oh chosen one.
Uh... :uhdrop: I'll be back with more after I've uh, read a few others... uh... right.
*bows*
Farewell, oh chosen one.
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Re: OPINIONS - Bart Wars
This script is very well done and funny, Karsten. I think all of the Simpsons/Furturama characters fit well with their Star Wars counterparts. I got big larffs off of Marge and Nedwin especially. I thought Bender's cameo was funny, and I loved the appearance of Hans. Darth Homer is fun as well.
Are you planning on continuing the script, Karsten? It's really funny, so I am hoping that you are.
Are you planning on continuing the script, Karsten? It's really funny, so I am hoping that you are.
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Hilarious script, Karsten! 'Bout time someone did a SW spoof...
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*adds to the to-read list* :D
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Sweet Arnie Pie in the sky!
I was somewhat unsure when I started reading this script. Wait... whom am I kidding? I felt *very* unsure, seeing how Graham has been planning to write a Simpsonic parody of the Star Wars saga for years. Not that I was planning to flame, but... but I can't find a way to end that sentence.
No need for that now. Graham, you're a great writer, but Karsten beat you to this. This script has all the magic of Star Wars, with a heady injection of humour. Bender's cameo and the discussion on sexism were the absolute peaks, together with most every scene featuring Darth Homer. You've got the characters of Homer, Marge and Lisa down to a tee, yet consistent with their roles in the film, and I can't wait to see more of Bart and Ned. Oh, and the intro text was fun as well. And the coded names of Marge and Maggie. And most everything they said. And Lisa being interrogated. And... and... but I'm stalling.
This is a perfect parody of one of my favourite films. More! MORE!
I was somewhat unsure when I started reading this script. Wait... whom am I kidding? I felt *very* unsure, seeing how Graham has been planning to write a Simpsonic parody of the Star Wars saga for years. Not that I was planning to flame, but... but I can't find a way to end that sentence.
No need for that now. Graham, you're a great writer, but Karsten beat you to this. This script has all the magic of Star Wars, with a heady injection of humour. Bender's cameo and the discussion on sexism were the absolute peaks, together with most every scene featuring Darth Homer. You've got the characters of Homer, Marge and Lisa down to a tee, yet consistent with their roles in the film, and I can't wait to see more of Bart and Ned. Oh, and the intro text was fun as well. And the coded names of Marge and Maggie. And most everything they said. And Lisa being interrogated. And... and... but I'm stalling.
This is a perfect parody of one of my favourite films. More! MORE!
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Re: OPINIONS - Bart Wars
Thanks for all the comments. I'm glad you like it.
And don't worry, there will be more.
And don't worry, there will be more.
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Re: OPINIONS - Bart Wars
Comments about Bart Wars.
"Rebel troopers hurry through the hallway as the
explosion rocks the ship. Alarms sound. Two droids,
MAGGIE (M2-G2) and MARGE (3-MRG), are trying to make
their way through the hallway."
LOL M2-G2, 3-MRG. I love it. Already we're in parody flavour country.
"The shields are down? Are you sure?"
Heh the ships been playing silly buggers with an ISD [The ISD Devastator if anyone’s interested] that has more guns than Col Gadafee, what did you expect?
"The Rebel troopers aim their weapons at the door which
suddenly explodes inwards."
Just a thought but why not have one of them say "Freeze door, we've got you covered!" It's such a classic SW joke...
"Hey, killing those stormtroopers is easier than I
thought."
Killing stormbloopers is like killing goblins, my granny could do it. There's lots of em though.
"What did you expect? Their armor is made from cardboard."
Heh! That's ablative cardboard I'll have you know![JK]
"...of course, with television and video games
leading today's youth into a moral sewer, it doesn't
surprise me at all that..."
I thought the Galactic Empire was leading the youth into the moral sewer, oh well.
"(shakes his head) Sheesh, what a mess! Don't those Rebels
have a cleaning lady?"
*resists temptation to say* "Yes, or we did until this atrocity.."
"You were wrong, my Lord. The Rebels *were* smart enough
not to put the stolen plans into the main computer."
Yeah well knowing the Corellians the main computer was probably a Z80 anyway...
"(clears his throat) I think he's dead, sir."
Ah Hans is dead, everything is as it should be. )
"Lisa starts to run, but one of the
remaining troopers fires a small dart at her which hits
her in the arm."
Darts? The hell? What happened to the cool blue stun effect?!
"A new explosion tears a big hole in the wall next to
Marge. She jumps back."
That's the stormbloopers idea of 'searching carefully'. Subtle.
"Bah! You are a traitor to the Empire! You..."
Isn't Darth supposed to tell her the Emperor abolished the Senate? Really I see no reason to change that bit...
"Oh yes, and have this imbe-ma-cile thrown
out an airlock."
Awwww can't you have him throttle him like he did will Ozzel...I love Darth's strangling scenes.
"(triumphantly) Look, sir! Droids!"
Wow you must be Sherlock f*8king Holms to work that out!!
"(voice of Gil) Good afternoon, sir! We're the Jawas, at
your service. Looking for droids? I'm your man! (worriedly)
You *are* looking for droids, aren't you? Please tell me
you're looking for droids, I need the money!"
LOL Good use of Gil there, I find him as a Jawa really funny.
""Roman Catholic"."
Space Catholics? I don't think soooo...
"(narrowing his eyes suspiciously) What's that supposed
to mean? You do believe in the Maker, don't you?"
Of course in Bender's case the maker 'might' well be another robot in a factory...
"I sure hope so. He's evil."
Sure Bender's evil, your point being?
"(fed up) Evil, eh? Well, in this case, I'll just sell
him to the Muslim missionary at the other side of
Beggar's Canyon!"
LOL Not run by a Mr Bin Laden is it? Awwwww baaadddd...I can't believe you put that in. Even *I* don't think their evil per say. Misguided perhaps, religious zealots probably, but this takes the piss.
"...here we are."
Yes, Tatoonee in the outer rim territories, a place so boring the Empire didn't even bother to invade it!
Well I liked most of it although there was a missed opportunity for a joke with the door, the space Catholics idea is a bit naff and if you ask me the comment about certain religious groups was dammed right unnecessary. Besides how any of those religions can be in Star Wars is beyond me, it's meant to be in a galaxy far far away a long time ago remember? They only have the 'force'. The use of a trank dart was bizarre as well in an age of blasters and spaceships. Oh and make Darth Homer Throttle that guy, go on you know you want to. Anyway, the droids where funny. The stormbloopers where as funny as ever. I LOLed at Gil as a Jawa.
All in all it's ok but there are some things I would defiantly change, after all it's never good to make jokes that are outside the context of the setting. That and there are some moments begging for a gag or two. It'll be interesting to see what the rest of it's like.
"Rebel troopers hurry through the hallway as the
explosion rocks the ship. Alarms sound. Two droids,
MAGGIE (M2-G2) and MARGE (3-MRG), are trying to make
their way through the hallway."
LOL M2-G2, 3-MRG. I love it. Already we're in parody flavour country.
"The shields are down? Are you sure?"
Heh the ships been playing silly buggers with an ISD [The ISD Devastator if anyone’s interested] that has more guns than Col Gadafee, what did you expect?
"The Rebel troopers aim their weapons at the door which
suddenly explodes inwards."
Just a thought but why not have one of them say "Freeze door, we've got you covered!" It's such a classic SW joke...
"Hey, killing those stormtroopers is easier than I
thought."
Killing stormbloopers is like killing goblins, my granny could do it. There's lots of em though.
"What did you expect? Their armor is made from cardboard."
Heh! That's ablative cardboard I'll have you know![JK]
"...of course, with television and video games
leading today's youth into a moral sewer, it doesn't
surprise me at all that..."
I thought the Galactic Empire was leading the youth into the moral sewer, oh well.
"(shakes his head) Sheesh, what a mess! Don't those Rebels
have a cleaning lady?"
*resists temptation to say* "Yes, or we did until this atrocity.."
"You were wrong, my Lord. The Rebels *were* smart enough
not to put the stolen plans into the main computer."
Yeah well knowing the Corellians the main computer was probably a Z80 anyway...
"(clears his throat) I think he's dead, sir."
Ah Hans is dead, everything is as it should be. )
"Lisa starts to run, but one of the
remaining troopers fires a small dart at her which hits
her in the arm."
Darts? The hell? What happened to the cool blue stun effect?!
"A new explosion tears a big hole in the wall next to
Marge. She jumps back."
That's the stormbloopers idea of 'searching carefully'. Subtle.
"Bah! You are a traitor to the Empire! You..."
Isn't Darth supposed to tell her the Emperor abolished the Senate? Really I see no reason to change that bit...
"Oh yes, and have this imbe-ma-cile thrown
out an airlock."
Awwww can't you have him throttle him like he did will Ozzel...I love Darth's strangling scenes.
"(triumphantly) Look, sir! Droids!"
Wow you must be Sherlock f*8king Holms to work that out!!
"(voice of Gil) Good afternoon, sir! We're the Jawas, at
your service. Looking for droids? I'm your man! (worriedly)
You *are* looking for droids, aren't you? Please tell me
you're looking for droids, I need the money!"
LOL Good use of Gil there, I find him as a Jawa really funny.
""Roman Catholic"."
Space Catholics? I don't think soooo...
"(narrowing his eyes suspiciously) What's that supposed
to mean? You do believe in the Maker, don't you?"
Of course in Bender's case the maker 'might' well be another robot in a factory...
"I sure hope so. He's evil."
Sure Bender's evil, your point being?
"(fed up) Evil, eh? Well, in this case, I'll just sell
him to the Muslim missionary at the other side of
Beggar's Canyon!"
LOL Not run by a Mr Bin Laden is it? Awwwww baaadddd...I can't believe you put that in. Even *I* don't think their evil per say. Misguided perhaps, religious zealots probably, but this takes the piss.
"...here we are."
Yes, Tatoonee in the outer rim territories, a place so boring the Empire didn't even bother to invade it!
Well I liked most of it although there was a missed opportunity for a joke with the door, the space Catholics idea is a bit naff and if you ask me the comment about certain religious groups was dammed right unnecessary. Besides how any of those religions can be in Star Wars is beyond me, it's meant to be in a galaxy far far away a long time ago remember? They only have the 'force'. The use of a trank dart was bizarre as well in an age of blasters and spaceships. Oh and make Darth Homer Throttle that guy, go on you know you want to. Anyway, the droids where funny. The stormbloopers where as funny as ever. I LOLed at Gil as a Jawa.
All in all it's ok but there are some things I would defiantly change, after all it's never good to make jokes that are outside the context of the setting. That and there are some moments begging for a gag or two. It'll be interesting to see what the rest of it's like.
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An excellent script, though of course you have a long way to go before it's finiahed.
I mostly agree with Stan, but the religion jokes don't bother me - I found them very funny, and Ned wouldn't be Ned without some of that.
I mostly agree with Stan, but the religion jokes don't bother me - I found them very funny, and Ned wouldn't be Ned without some of that.
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Quite good, quite good. And funny.
Yeah, make him strangle the guy like he does to Bart... from five feet away.Awwww can't you have him throttle him like he did will Ozzel...I love Darth's strangling scenes.
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[Eagerly awaits more]
Out of curiousity, is Sideshow Bob going to be in this?
Out of curiousity, is Sideshow Bob going to be in this?
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Yeah, Darth Homer says: "Why you little!" *choke grip*
Stan, I don't think he meant to say that the Muslim missionaries are evil. The salesman... uh... SalesJawa probably just meant that he'd sell Bender there if Ned didn't want him. Heh, the door joke was fun...
Stan, I don't think he meant to say that the Muslim missionaries are evil. The salesman... uh... SalesJawa probably just meant that he'd sell Bender there if Ned didn't want him. Heh, the door joke was fun...
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Here we go. Part two, featuring a holographic message, an old Jedi Knight, a megalomanic Admiral and a hilariously serious Grand Moff.
Now, about some of your comments...
I've added another sentence to it ("I bet they won't be nearly as choosy as you, you...Church Boy!") to show what the Head Jawa was trying to say. Feel free to interpret that, too, if you like.
As for the other references to Earth religions, they'll stay. This is just a parody, after all, and not to be taken too seriously, and like Steve said, you can't have Ned Flanders in a story without some references to Christianity, can you?
(And besides, I've never heard anyone complain about the fact that they had names like Luke, Ben, Owen and other English or at least English-sounding names in that "galaxy far, far away".)
But no, Bob won't be in the story. All roles are taken, and besides, I couldn't think of any character who would fit him.
And Darth Homer will not strangle the Captain. I think actually showing the "execution" would disrupt the flow of the story (and I just like his line "Say 'eep' while you still can."). And besides, if he were to strangle every single incompetent officer, he wouldn't have much time for anything else.
Now, about some of your comments...
*LOL* Great line!"(shakes his head) Sheesh, what a mess! Don't those Rebels
have a cleaning lady?"
*resists temptation to say* "Yes, or we did until this atrocity.."
Budget problems. Even the Empire has them. I was going to have one of the stormtroopers say, "Say what you want, I still think we need better weapons", but I dropped that line in favor of the "Lord Blubber" line. But I think I'll add it again."Lisa starts to run, but one of the
remaining troopers fires a small dart at her which hits
her in the arm."
Darts? The hell? What happened to the cool blue stun effect?!
I should have known that line would be misunderstood. :uhdrop:"(fed up) Evil, eh? Well, in this case, I'll just sell
him to the Muslim missionary at the other side of
Beggar's Canyon!"
LOL Not run by a Mr Bin Laden is it? Awwwww baaadddd...I can't believe you put that in. Even *I* don't think their evil per say. Misguided perhaps, religious zealots probably, but this takes the piss.
I've added another sentence to it ("I bet they won't be nearly as choosy as you, you...Church Boy!") to show what the Head Jawa was trying to say. Feel free to interpret that, too, if you like.
As for the other references to Earth religions, they'll stay. This is just a parody, after all, and not to be taken too seriously, and like Steve said, you can't have Ned Flanders in a story without some references to Christianity, can you?
(And besides, I've never heard anyone complain about the fact that they had names like Luke, Ben, Owen and other English or at least English-sounding names in that "galaxy far, far away".)
I knew that question would come.Out of curiousity, is Sideshow Bob going to be in this?
But no, Bob won't be in the story. All roles are taken, and besides, I couldn't think of any character who would fit him.
And Darth Homer will not strangle the Captain. I think actually showing the "execution" would disrupt the flow of the story (and I just like his line "Say 'eep' while you still can."). And besides, if he were to strangle every single incompetent officer, he wouldn't have much time for anything else.
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Just getting better and better. Abey-Wan is hilarious whenever he opens his mouth, and the highlights were the story of Bart's dad's death, as well as "your uncle talking". I loved the final scene as well, even though I've always pictured Smithers as Grand Moff Tarkin. Skinner looks the part, though. You've really made my day. I'm sorry this isn't a balanced review, I'm just so happy to read this wonderful parody. It has more than just a whiff of the magic of the original, too. As for the "it's your uncle talking" line, it actually improves on it. And the Sandbullies... great idea!
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Too funny! And Grandpa as Obi-Wan was a great idea - I was thinking of Robert as Obi-Wan.
ROBERT: ?
HADISIA: Don't ask.
ROBERT: ?
HADISIA: Don't ask.
WELSH: What the hell was that?
FRASER: The sound of a grown man squealing in a manner not becoming a member of the Royal Canadian Mounted Police.
WELSH: Oh, Turnbull.
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FRASER: The sound of a grown man squealing in a manner not becoming a member of the Royal Canadian Mounted Police.
WELSH: Oh, Turnbull.
-"Mountie Sings the Blues," due SOUTH