FIC: Raven Must Die (complete)
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FIC: Raven Must Die (complete)
Since the Venture Industries forum is now dead (it's still online, but posting has been disabled), I guess I might as well post my Venture Brothers fanfics on this board from now on.
So to start with, "Raven Must Die", written for a request by Missy. Set a couple of years from now, when Dean and Triana meet up again at university. Dean still loves Triana; Triana still loves Raven. Needless to say, there may be some drama.
Set in the same continuity as my story Seven Days to the Wolves, but the plots are independent.
Note: still a draft, so any constructive criticism is greatly appreciated.
So to start with, "Raven Must Die", written for a request by Missy. Set a couple of years from now, when Dean and Triana meet up again at university. Dean still loves Triana; Triana still loves Raven. Needless to say, there may be some drama.
Set in the same continuity as my story Seven Days to the Wolves, but the plots are independent.
Note: still a draft, so any constructive criticism is greatly appreciated.
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Re: FIC: Raven Must Die (work in progress)
Chapter 2. Our protagonists actually meet up.
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Re: FIC: Raven Must Die (work in progress)
Oooh. I'll give this a read... though TBH I don't actually recall Raven at all, though I'm sure I can take a guess.
It was so much easier to blame it on Them. It was bleakly depressing to think that They were Us. If it was Them, then nothing was anyone’s fault. If it was Us, what did that make Me? After all, I’m one of Us. I must be. I’ve certainly never thought of myself as one of Them. No one ever thinks of themselves as one of Them. We’re always one of Us. It’s Them that do bad things. - Jingo, Terry Pratchett
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Thanks for reading! And urk, you're right about that one sentence. Looks like I fell asleep halfway through writing it or something.
Raven was only ever seen for a few minutes in "Operation P.R.O.M.", so it's not surprising if you can't remember him. His entire character was essentially that he looks like Edward Cullen and walks with crutches.
Raven was only ever seen for a few minutes in "Operation P.R.O.M.", so it's not surprising if you can't remember him. His entire character was essentially that he looks like Edward Cullen and walks with crutches.
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Re: FIC: Raven Must Die (work in progress)
Yay, I'm so glad to see this here!!
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Re: FIC: Raven Must Die (work in progress)
Chapter 3. Things escalate quickly as Triana gets some very unpleasant news from home.
EDIT: Reuploaded to add a couple of lines I'd forgotten.
EDIT: Reuploaded to add a couple of lines I'd forgotten.
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Re: FIC: Raven Must Die (work in progress)
A heads-up: chapters 4 and 5 are finished, but I'm waiting to post them until I've finished the epilogue.
EDIT: The rest of the story is posted now, see below.
EDIT: The rest of the story is posted now, see below.
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Re: FIC: Raven Must Die (work in progress)
YESS
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Thank you very much! I'll upload Chapter 4 soon. (And your feelings may very well be correct.)
And thank you especially for catching that typo. I originally had the astral projection dialogue be in italics, then decided to just format it as normal dialogue with quotation marks, but I clearly missed that line.
And thank you especially for catching that typo. I originally had the astral projection dialogue be in italics, then decided to just format it as normal dialogue with quotation marks, but I clearly missed that line.
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Chapter 4: "City of the Fireflies". Remember when this was a sweet college romance? Pepperidge Farm remembers.
Content warning: some R-rated language. I believe that's the only objectionable content.
Content warning: some R-rated language. I believe that's the only objectionable content.
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Chapter 5: "Aftermath". This is the important part of the story.
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Re: FIC: Raven Must Die (work in progress)
The epilogue. Well, it's been a good run.
Constructive criticism is, as always, highly appreciated.
Constructive criticism is, as always, highly appreciated.
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Re: FIC: Raven Must Die (complete)
Got both downloaded, will come back next weekend to feedback!
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Re: FIC: Raven Must Die (complete)
Part 4!:
Part 5!:
Part 6!:
The whole series is beautiful, well-constructed and highly worth reading! I LOVE it so much!!
Part 5!:
Part 6!:
The whole series is beautiful, well-constructed and highly worth reading! I LOVE it so much!!
Now known as Lisabella! (Or Missy. Missy's good.)
Creator of the Waving Universe
Crack!Fic, The Marge Simpson Way: "Just then, Sir Lancelot rode up on a white horse and saved Joan of Arc. They got married and lived in a spaceship. The end." - Tales from the Public Domain, "Hot Child In The City"
Creator of the Waving Universe
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Thank you very much! You've always been the reader I most wanted to impress with this story (I originally started it as a request for you, after all), so the fact that you enjoyed it means everything. And thanks for catching that punctuation mistake.
Also, here's a link to the song Raven always wanted them to play at his funeral. (I recently realised that I put a lot more music references in this fic than I usually do. And ironically enough, most of them aren't to David Bowie.)
Also, here's a link to the song Raven always wanted them to play at his funeral. (I recently realised that I put a lot more music references in this fic than I usually do. And ironically enough, most of them aren't to David Bowie.)
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